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Reisson Poh's avatar

This is beautiful storytelling. Its like the childhood stories we listen to with a "moral of the story". But this one is so well written. The realisation that this might happen in the future is almost haunting.

Tahir's avatar

Thank you so much. If it left you thinking after reading, then the story did what it needed to do. In my childhood, I learned a lot from stories.

Azure Jo Storm's avatar

Amazing piece here!

Tahir's avatar

Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it! 😊 You might also enjoy the behind-the-scenes of this story in 'The Weight of the Words.'

Luke John's avatar

Outstanding

Tahir's avatar

Thank you so much.

Imlipongla's avatar

loved this💗 took me into some trance mythical escape

Tahir's avatar

Thanks a lot, I’m so happy it reached you. It really inspires me to keep going.

Miles Hack's avatar

Love the alternate reality shift, and the need to conceal the sins, lest it happen again.

Tahir's avatar

Thank you, Miles. Do you think knowing the truth would actually stop it from happening again, or just change the way it happens?

HVR's avatar

Devastating and real. I felt it. All of it.

Tahir's avatar

Thank you for reading and feeling it.

HVR's avatar

Always.

Dawnithic's avatar

Tahir, this story beautifully entwines memory with myth, showing how truths are buried, and lies become legend. The weight of human choices and their consequences on civilizations scares me. Your portrayal of legacy, guilt, and the fragility of memory feels both intimate and cosmic. It leaves the reader questioning not just the past, but the choices that shape the future.

Tahir's avatar

Thank you so much, Waseem. I really appreciate how deeply you engaged with the story and your thoughtful reflections on it.

AsukaHotaru's avatar

“Truth whispered. Lies shouted together.” Yeah. That line hit like a door shutting, and I just kind of stared at it for a second. The whole thing has that calm-voice, bad-news feeling that won’t let go.

Tahir's avatar

Thank you, Asuka. I’m glad you liked it. I feel grateful to have thoughtful readers like you, and I really appreciate your support. And yes, to truly hear the truth, we need a bit of noise cancellation.

Tony Burkinshaw's avatar

I do so love your storytelling style(s). Important messages wrapped in easy fables.

Tahir's avatar

Thank you so much, Tony. I’ve always felt a story leaves a stronger impression than a lecture. What do you think?

Regolith's avatar

You have an incredible gift. What a beautiful way to relay such an important message.

Tahir's avatar

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your kind words. I’ve always believed stories can carry important messages in a way people remember. I feel gifted to have readers as thoughtful and kind as you.

stabilise's avatar

Quite lovely.

Tahir's avatar

Thank you so much! I’m glad you enjoyed it.